Critique , please. The beat of seduction.? - satin head wraps
A mist in the air as I move through space
I'm in the crosshairs
And it was wrapped in silk and seduction
I (the beat of the drum can not be
The low was put in my head)
And he knows
Tuesday, January 12, 2010
Satin Head Wraps Critique , Please. The Beat Of Seduction.?
5 comments:
Oooh, it's fun and inspiring. I'm not sure if the pace was, but I'm feeling really. I love the whispers in parentheses for the reader, especially in the fifth row, I think it leads to a feeling that only you can touch, but not quite. The last line, exciting, and I want to dim the lights, closed the door, and all the clothes ... Well ... fall.
Why is the state that you think you know that there is. The poets of our time ...
Why is the state that you think you know that there is. The poets of our time ...
Increases the beating of the heart, enthusiasm, interest. A very beautiful and very attractive time in the flow.
Oo. It's a sexy little poem. I like it!
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